Annotation Workshop.

February 1, 2018

Some of the biggest issues I saw in the annotations were that students had most of the information but didn't have it in the correct order that you want it in. Also, not a lot of students incorporated direct quotes which was another one of the things you wanted to see. The paragraph everyone struggled with the most was the third because is was hard to compare the source back to other sources. However, some things I saw done really well were everyones second paragraphs. Everyone did a really good job summarizing their articles and this will make it a lot easier for them when they actually go to write the paper. Another positive I saw in the papers was a good background of the authors to prove credibility. In this annotated bibliography it is important to prove credibility because the sources we use are only allowed to be scholarly articles.

I read Takaia and Victoria's annotated bibs:

Here is what I edited from one of Takaia's sources: https://fashionista.com/2014/01/beauty-vloggers.

Annotated Bibliography

Mau, Dhani. “How the Fastest-Rising Beauty Vloggers Found Success.” Fashionista,(suppose to be italic)

(indent)30 Jan. 2014, https://fashionista.com/2014/01/beauty-vloggers. Accessed 21 Jan. 2018.

Mau’s article on Fashionista.com offers insight on the tricks and tips for success on YouTube as a beauty vlogger. The article has interviews from real YouTube beauty vloggers who have well over a million subscribers on their channels, rose to fame rather quickly, and talks about how to do so in an industry that has become very populated with vloggers who are doing the exact same thing as everyone else. The vloggers featured in the article include Michelle Phan, Bethany Mota, and Ingrid Nilsen. The ladies talk about how bringing personality and originality into their channels is the thing that sets them apart from others, and brings the most views. Creating videos that viewers request also gets these ladies views and keeps people coming back to watch more videos.

This is a really good paragraph. I would add a little more about Mau specifically so you can prove the article to be more credible.

This article relates to my research question, can new beauty vloggers gain success on YouTube with an overcrowded industry, because the article discusses how these vloggers deal with this issue and gives their own experience.

This article isn’t like the other sources, because this article refers to experiences from 2014, and I will be comparing this information with tactics used from influencers in 2017.

Add more summary of the article in your paragraph

What I find interesting in the article is the fact that out of the three vloggers mention, I only recognize two of them, Michelle Phan and Bethany Mota. The article includes some branding and deals they received because of YouTube, including a clothing line with Aeropostal and a Dr.Pepper campaign, which I remember from 2014. The third vlogger, Ingrid Nilsen, on the other hand, didn’t have deals like those, and I wonder what made her different from the others. I also find it interesting that 2014 was a year where the YouTube beauty industry was too overpopulated as well. I didn’t begin to watch YouTube until 2015, and I didn’t realize vloggers were struggling to find success then too. I am eager to find out what vloggers today have to go through to find success today.

This is the paragraph where you are suppose to say why this article is special. So I would move the last sentence of your last paragraph to this paragraph.

I think you did really good on this annotation. There a few little things to fix and that’s it. The biggest thing is you have all the information you need in the paragraphs, but you need to rearrange it into the format Maddie wants.

I think the strongest part of your annotation is why this article specifically is different than everyone else’s. In your paper it will be cool to use this article to show what make up blogging was like in the past vs what it is like now.

As a reader your annotation is telling me about some famous make up bloggers from who were mentioned in your article. As a skimmed the article you did a pretty solid job summing it up.

In your annotation, you just had two small fixes: italicize the Fashionista and indent the second line.